Showing posts with label poem. Show all posts
Showing posts with label poem. Show all posts

Saturday, January 30, 2010

I grow old....

Recently Nabokov heard that John Crowe Ransom, whose poetry he greatly admires, was rewriting many of his old poems at the age of 80 and dismantling their classic beauty. Vladimir turned to Vera and said quietly, Never let me do that.

(From an interview with Martha Duffy in Time Magazine, May 23, 1969)

BROWN PENNY

I whispered, 'I am too young,' And then, 'I am old enough'; Wherefore I threw a penny To find out if I might love. 'Go and love, go and love, young man, If the lady be young and fair.' Ah, penny, brown penny, brown penny, I am looped in the loops of her hair. O love is the crooked thing, There is nobody wise enough To find out all that is in it, For he would be thinking of love Till the stars had run away And the shadows eaten the moon. Ah, penny, brown penny, brown penny, One cannot begin it too soon.

(W.B. Yeats from his Collected Poems,Definitive Edition,1956)

BROWN PENNY (2nd version)

... (1st stanza identical) ... And the penny sang up in my face, 'There is nobody wise enough To find out all that is in it, For he would be thinking of love That is looped in the loops of her hair, Till the loops of time had run.' Ah, penny, brown penny, brown penny, One cannot begin it too soon.

(The version—based upon Yeats's late (1937) modification—that is given in Richard Finneran, The Collected Works of W.B. Yeats, Vol I, The Poems (2nd Ed), 1997)

Brown Penny existed substantially in the first form since its original publication in The Green Helmet and Other Poems. So it was written in—or possibly considerably before—1910. Not to second-guess the Master, but it was a perfect little poem, and its images and diction are certainly tied to that period of Yeats's writing. So why did he, in 1937, feel compelled to put forward, as his last word on the subject, this wretched replacement for the second stanza?

Well, if nothing else, the occasion presented itself. In the middle to late thirties several publishers were preparing collected or selected editions of Yeats's writings, so Yeats had several opportunities—while he was doing proof corrections— to change poems. For the most part these changes were minimal—add a period, withdraw a comma, slightly recast a line—but in a few instances they were more substantial. In 1937 he submitted the second version of Brown Penny to be included in a contemplated edition by Scribner. The Scribner book was never published, but the version Yeats rather cavalierly supplied them is his last known. So, by the ethic of the editor, it is the official version. Thus Richard Finneran, the premier editor of Yeats, included this version in The Poems, rather than the haunting, nearly perfect original, in that definitive collection.

He was stuck: he had to use the second version. In an earlier scholarly work Finneran has a perfunctory commentary on the changes:

This revision continues the dialogue already established between the speaker and the penny, in the process eliminating the awkward image of the lunivorous shadows. Moreover, the "loops of time" suggest connections with the gyres of A Vision.from Editing Yeats's Poems: a Reconsideration (1990), p.38

The passage of course is complete piffle, but perhaps Finneran had a twinge of conscience here: yes, this version must prevail, so let's see if we can justify it as better. But neither this nor any other explanation accompanied the changeling when it finally saw print, but only a bare notation of its provenance, buried in the endnotes.

[The foregoing is not in any way to disparage the work of Finneran. He was a thorough and discerning scholar and—what is more important—a true lover of Yeats.]

It was 1997 or early 1998 when I first got The Poems in my hot little hands. I perused it happily, enjoying the thought that all the poems were here, right here. Fairly soon, within a year I suppose, I flipped over to Brown Penny, just for the pleasure of reading it from that volume. But what I saw there first puzzled, then gradually, after I had ensured there was no mistake, horrified.

In a way, it was like finding that your father had a child from a former marriage—not world-shattering, perhaps, but certainly world-transforming. I had always thought of a poem as something that didn't change, as a thing. Then I find it's more like your uncle Eddie who, after an exemplary career at the bank, got arrested for embezzlement.Or, as Nabokov so wittily puts it: We would prefer not to have known at all our neighbor, the retired hot-dog stand operator, if it turns out that he has just produced the greatest book of poetry his age has seen. (from the Vintage Lolita, p265)

When I was a tender high-school sophomore I was, as is customary, forced to read poetry. But my English teacher that year was magic: she made literature seem an enchanted journey, rather than the usual forced march. We read the standard stuff, I suppose, but what stayed with me was Keats's La Belle Dame Sans Merci:

Ah, what can ail thee, wretched wight, Alone and palely loitering! The sedge has withered from the lake, And no birds sing. Ah, what can ail thee, wretched wight, So haggard and so woe-begone? . . .

And so forth. I never had the poem by memory, except for the first two stanzas, which in idle moments I would find myself repeating. Every once in a while in after years, though, I would flip to La Belle in whatever anthology was at hand and read the whole thing out loud. After a while I noticed that the poem seemed to have changed:

O what can ail thee, knight-at-arms, Alone and palely loitering? The sedge has withered from the lake, And no birds sing. O what can ail thee, knight-at-arms, So haggard and so woe-begone? . . .

I thought I remembered it differently, but in effect I just shrugged. I would occasionally read the official version, which seemed to involve a knight, but would still murmur to myself the stanzas that I now thought of as mine, about a wight. Recently, though, I said to myself, this is ridiculous, am I imagining these words? So I did a bit of research.

Keats's originally wrote the knight version, and included it in a letter to his parents in 1819, but actually published the wight version later that year. The wight version was the only version for all of Keats's (admittedly short) life, but later the chronologically earlier knight version started gaining traction with critics [ah! critics!], who felt that the original in Keats's hand should prevail. They hoked up all sorts of reasons for this preference, most spurious of course. The net result is that I can no longer find my favored version in print, as the "knight" forces have prevailed.

So what is to be done? Are we to be at the pleasure of critics and editors for the words we wish to say? Certainly the Keats is long out of copyright, so we can use either version, or anything in-between.O what can ail thee, Erskine-Brown, Alone and palely loitering? The law-court now is closed and dark, And no judge sits. as Rumpole might have had it... But what of Brown Penny? Given the cancerous growth of copyright in the 20th century, I have no idea when we will be free to use the old good one. Oh, sure, we'll always be able to gather in secret conclaves and speak the forbidden words, but in public—I wonder. Must we give lip service to the critically-sanctioned words, and suppress those we love? Must there be an official version of a poem?Of course, I've been able to use the old version in this essay, which purports to be a critical study. Just as a priest of the Inquisition was allowed to read heretical writings (doubtless while holding his nose) so I, as a (self-described) guardian of literary virtue may comment on official non-versions of poems, without being corrupted by them. It's a matter of character...

Well, I've still got La Belle:

All Keats is out of copyright, so I can have my wretched wight.

Wednesday, August 12, 2009

You Don't Want to Know!

If you would, in your manners, be right,
and, conversing, bring only delight,
you'll not ask for the truth
(a blunder uncouth),
which just forces a fib or a fight!

So...

  • Don't ask a waiter what's in a sauce.
  • Don't ask your doctor how long you've got.
  • Don't ask your divorce lawyer whether you're in the right.
  • Don't ask your teen-age daughter whether she's had sex.
  • Don't ask your teen-age son...anything.
  • Don't ask your father about the war, his love life, or global warming.
  • Don't ask your mother if she loves you more than she loves your brother.
  • Don't ask your dog whether he's been rolling in shit.
  • Don't ask your cat where he's stashed his latest kill.
  • Don't ask anyone what they think of bankers, the economic recovery initiatives, or the health care system.
  • Don't ask a long-time friend whether you've gotten old.
  • Don't ask your spouse whether anything you do is irritating.

...and so on.

I admire the way you've used tact
to forge a societal pact:
as big fibs and small lies
are life's pleasing disguise,
you all happily take them for fact.

Wednesday, July 29, 2009

What he's saying is...

David Foster Wallace addressed the graduating class of Kenyon College in 2005, and committed suicide in 2008. The latter act has, retrospectively, given the former a significance it would not otherwise have had. Commencement talks are usually as perishable as wedding toasts, and for similar reasons―should they survive―take on ironical color over the years. This particular talk actually went viral, I suppose because of the following:

It is not the least bit coincidental that adults who commit suicide with firearms almost always shoot themselves in: the head. They shoot the terrible master. And the truth is that most of these suicides are actually dead long before they pull the trigger.

Poor DFW! Some Stephen Covey, some Anthony Robbins he is. (Whoops! Was.) Ah, the irony. Or, worse: how pathetic.

But, no, I think not. Irony is found in a―sometimes subtle―disjunction between assumptions and actuality, patheticness (yes, there is such a word) in a patent disjunction between ambition and actuality. If the Upbeat-Speech-and-Later-Suicide were an ironic arc, then DFW would have been, in the speech, an inspirational speaker who, by his suicide, showed he never took his own advice. If the USaLS were simply pathetic, he would have believed that those stretching exercises for a healthy mind could cure his.

But neither color really sticks: in fact DFW knew he was walking in the darkness, and his own case was far more desperate than these freshly-scrubbed grads would know. His advice was pretty much what it seemed to be: how can you enlarge your mind in a world that has made adulthood a series of trivial trials and petty annoyances? But remember:

Again, please don't think that I'm giving you moral advice, or that I'm saying you are supposed to think this way, or that anyone expects you to just automatically do it. Because it's hard. It takes will and effort, and if you are like me, some days you won't be able to do it, or you just flat out won't want to.

DFW was asking these normal kids to take their perceptions out for a stroll, or even a vacation, once in a while. But he very well knew that at some point his own terrible master might make him climb Mont Blanc in his pajamas. For the moment he let that go, and simply spoke of sanity and kindness in a world that conspires against them.

The bushman treks many a dusty mile
intent upon the spoor of a giraffe.
He does not think about his weary life,
but slowly trots with an expectant smile.
However, should the missionary’s wife
have waiting by the wayside food and drink
he might just stop and munch a spicy roll,
and that subversion of his single goal
might wake him from his trance and make him think
about the empty end of all his strife.
Then all his living ties break link by link
as easily as that. The sun would sink
and throw his shadow as he stood there still;
the moon outline his figure on the hill.

Thursday, July 23, 2009

Coughin' Nails

...
They used to smoke in their cars,
rolling the windows down and letting their red nails
hang out, little stoplights:
Stop now, before the green
comes to cover up your tall brown bodies.

(from My Aunts by Meghan O'Rourke)

Well, we know you're our niece and all, Mag:
we indulge you your rant on the rag.
But the next time you mus'
primly criticize us,
just think twice, and then light up a fag...

Thursday, June 11, 2009

Heaven can wait



If happiness is the goal, why not live in a dream:
a velvet coffin floating in a soft stream
through a warm and endless evening?

Nature couldn't know we'd ever have guessed
our node of pleasure, locus of our lust...
So can't we tickle it now, eternally,
and pray not to be rudely waked some day?

Tuesday, June 9, 2009

The dark side of excellence

"...Carla had a gift that had brought her pain simply because it was not a bigger gift..."—Kathryn Chetkovich in Appetites

When first you perceive you've a gift,
it gives you a wonderful lift.
But then comes the joker:
you're still mediocre,
so you know that you've really been stiffed.

Tuesday, May 12, 2009

Smile, it's all hopeless ...

There once was just nothing but One
(no stars, no bananas, no Sun)
whose multiplication
became all Creation,
since Many is so much more fun.

Sunday, April 19, 2009

All our sweetness

Since a hunger yawned within him
he attended all their lies —
of the sacred faith they fought for,
of virgins in Paradise —

but knew the soil of a body
holds a restless, precious flower
that wants no heaven's forever
nor but one transcendent hour.

So he, like the ancient god-kings,
gave himself as sacrifice,
and smiled as his handlers strapped him,
their visionary eyes like ice.

And then, in the sudden thunder —
before blood and screams and pain —
his sad soul bloomed its moment,
not ever to shine again.